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wow someone went to the trouble of digging this up. It had to be at least 5 or 6 pages back by now.

I really need to start writing again lol.

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Madonna of the Courtyard

Lava locks brush cherub cheeks a rosy shade

They tumble and swirl like a rushing cascade

A gaze more lethal than the Reaper’s sickle

Jade Obsidian and sprinkled flecks of Nickel

Tender lips border a pixie’s smile

Ivory whites all gleaming with guile

Hands like the Carpenter’s calloused but caring

Adroit digits forge dulcet tones of daring

But They don’t look past the scars on her face

As she strums in the courtyard resplendent in grace

I see her though as the exquisite whole

I’d rather her red marks than blacks on her soul

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Freakin' love Ballad of the Mockingbird and Only for You.

I didnt get to read all of them because I have to go to school real soon!

But my man I think you are talented :dance:

(Sorry I cant be mean! Im not that critical of a person :doh:)

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ok ok no one laugh this is a haiku i wrote when i got drunk once at a party

The night full of honour

and gallantry unmatched

it sucks to have aids.

hehe and no. i don't have aids.

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Hi RCRanger

I noticed no one has posted here in a while, but after reading SOME of yours poems, they are definitely comment worthy. I'm not a poet or anything close so this is a total amateur opinion, I do write but other stuff (boring stuff...a.k.a. scientific journal articles). But I can assure you it's an honest opinion. I liked your poems very much, especially because I can tell they are very personal and meaningful to you. It's a great gift to be able to let out so many things with such beautiful words.

You have a unique style. I refuse to be the first person to say something MEAN about any of your poems even though you seem to be yearning for it. I don't think you'll get much negative feed back here. With that said ..this is not me being mean...it's a suggestion. Even though I didn't read ALL the poems I noticed they all rhyme, congrats you can rhyme well. But not all poems have to rhyme from what I know. Poetry can be anything you want it to be, that's what I like most about it. Maybe you should try writing a poem that doesn't rhyme, and see how that goes. I've read a lot of poems that don't rhyme and I find that some of them are a lot deeper and also I'm not guessing what the next last word of each sentence will be. ;) This turned into a rant...I do that sometimes :doh:

ok ok no one laugh this is a haiku i wrote when i got drunk once at a party

The night full of honour

and gallantry unmatched

it sucks to have aids.

hehe and no. i don't have aids.

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haha i thought i'd never see this thread again.

On the subject of free verse poetry. I write them all the time. Every night before i go to bed i free write a concious thought stream, and it basically is rough free verse poetry. I dont post them because A) I have dozen of comp books full of them, and B) I'm uninspired to write poetry as of right now. I'm in short story mode lol

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